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    dots Submission Name: Back Whendots

    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
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    dotsBack Whendots

    Back when all was cool
    I didn’t have to play
    By all your rules
    I was a free spirit
    I fluttered in the wind
    I was the comic relief
    You once said I was the bee’s knees
    That’s all changed now
    With you, you
    And your tempromental ways
    I thought I say bad
    I thought I knew right from wrong
    You changed that all
    You showed me the true
    Depths of evil
    So yes I miss it all because
    Back when all was cool
    I didn’t have to play
    By all your rules.

    Submitted on 2010-08-25 18:23:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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