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    dots Submission Name: Just Got to Get to The Got to dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsJust Got to Get to The Got to dots

    Too many things
    All glitter ball and capture
    Final escapees from bored and breed
    Of wanting
    Too many things

    Too much for simply decorating
    Baubles and trinkets
    To the highest degrees
    And lighting the darkness
    Of emptiness
    Too many dead
    And dieing

    To many bangles
    And cute bug eyed furry animals
    Designed by desperation
    The all excitement and entertainment of
    Having and owning
    Too many things

    Too many small worlds
    In bubbles for existing
    Too much
    To trouble
    Must have the latest thing
    Must have this useless stupidity
    Saved for a passing whim
    And pointless of
    Just got to get to the got to have

    To many of
    How to fill the vacancy
    The void of filling
    With descriptions of

    Too much manufacture of me
    Through material things
    And count this life of
    Through quality and quantity of

    Too many people
    To the ideology of

    Submitted on 2010-08-27 10:25:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well the title got me and then i saw it was you hehe... this is great however it did take a few re-reads to get the understand but i love its great

    correct me if i am wrong

    what your saying is there are too many material objects out there that are truely useless and only reason we (pple in general) long for them is because society as a whole has got us to believe that are vaulable to use and will prove to be usefull..?

    | Posted on 2010-08-29 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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