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    dots Submission Name: FALLINGdots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFALLINGdots
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    Inside your body
    you try to rise.
    Your heart is floating up
    as you are falling

    down.

    The air you breathe is
    hot & thick with dust.
    You feel it in your throat;
    it can't be swallowed.

    Your lungs are like balloons
    thirsting for helium
    so they too may float
    beside your heart.

    Your stomach starves
    and yet nothing can fill it.
    It too, yearns to float.

    Yet your body can't seem to let go.




    Submitted on 2010-08-27 14:32:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yikes! This sounds like falling into hell! It is drammatic and emotionally charged, and emotions are what poetry is all about!

    Nice work.

    | Posted on 2010-08-29 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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