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This is my sign of distress
This is my lack of success
But every once in awhile
I can still force a smile
After all the memories I repress
This is my fruitless attempt
This is my deserved judgement
Because I have not always done right
Though I would were you here tonight
Silhouette of karma That I resent
This is my sacred place
This is my sun-scarred face
When you spend too much time in bliss
Be driven insane by the things you miss
As they're snatched from under without a trace
This is my sigh of regret
This is my try to reset
But it doesn't matter what you dream
Things never end up what they seem
I'd never give back the day that we met
This is my place filled with doubt
This is my giving up shout
The feeling will come and it will go
As I lose my mind, I just don't know
I can no longer seem to figure you out
This is my deep goodnight kiss
This is my relentlessness this
I don't know what to do
I feel so lost without you
You're always everything that I miss
Submitted on 2010-08-28 07:37:27
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"She came in through the bathroom window"
OK, this reminded me of a Beatles tune in a nice sort of way. Maybe that and a little Dr. Seuss, also a nice sort. All in all I enjoyed it.
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