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    dots Submission Name: Rabbit in a Pet Shopdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsRabbit in a Pet Shopdots

    I remember softness
    A security of nudges and a sense of love
    I remember the taste of it
    As I slept

    I remember others
    Like me
    And others they were
    And I knew them as family

    We huddled and slept
    I remember the security
    The warmth and steady breathing
    But they are gone now

    Now I see nothing
    Nothing but a blank empty
    Now there is an insipid liquid
    And hard dry lumps for me to eat

    I feel an urge in my feet
    They scrabble at the cold smooth ground beneath me
    They ache with a sudden impending motion
    All I see is nothing

    I dream
    Vast places filled with something
    I have never seen
    Sounds haunt me, but I hear nothing

    Great shapes loom before me
    Higher and higher to an open space
    Where something so warm and so bright
    Dazzles my eyes

    I wake up
    Thinking it is all still there
    Waiting for me
    But no, all I see is nothing

    Nothing for me to do
    Nothing comes from the emptiness
    I wait patiently
    I sleep

    And smells waft tantalizingly
    Of something sweet that I could eat
    And soft something beneath my feet
    Makes them scrabble with pleasure in my sleep

    I wake up
    There is nothing
    Only emptiness
    I wait for the emptiness to end, I go back to sleep

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