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    dots Submission Name: Program Runningdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsProgram Runningdots

    It all seems so full of life
    A composite of human forms
    Faces moving within the crowd
    A flow spectacular
    Of individual messages
    Ebb and pass through the veins of the streets

    It all seems so calm
    So fluid
    On a circuit board of pre-ordained momentum
    It seems so open

    The program running

    An ornamentation surrounds them
    Lights, the sea, palm trees
    The middle mindless accoutrements
    Surround the late night shopping

    And exploding suns and galaxies
    Wheel their majesty
    Above them

    So full of life, it seems
    A television screen
    A projection of its latest advert
    And the institutionalised by having the good time

    Sleep, wake up, work, feed, shop, breed
    Study the designs of fit into place
    Purpose my loves of little consumerites
    A multitude sinc
    Of what they all think
    In tiny units repeated endlessly

    The program is running

    And exploding stars in the hearts of galaxies
    Wheel their majesty
    Above them

    It all seems so full of life
    So open
    Yet the closed
    And apparent prison doors
    Never seem to bother them

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      There are some excellent parts to this; in particular I liked

    And exploding suns and galaxies
    Wheel their majesty
    Above them

    It's a good question to ask, how much is preordained, and how much can we control. But there will always be people out there who just go along. They don't care one way or the other why things happen, nor think to ask.

    I saw this as a plea for people to notice the things around them. There are all these flashing billboards, but are they what we should see? No. We should see the palm trees and the sea and the stars and the solar flares of the sun.

    We live such a plastic existence, so far removed from what is normal and natural to us, then we ask: Why is society so restless?

    A lot of it is overstimulation. The advertiser's trick. The smoke and mirrors that blocks the ability to see the subliminal messages going on underneath.

    To think of the earth, and the course of humanity as a program running causes a neat chain of thought. Couldn't we put it all on standby for awhile so the earth could heal? Nature does this. We have seen it when a civilization has come past its golden age. It then collapses and a good portion of the memory of it is erased.

    This was a good way to start my day.

    Take Care:)
    | Posted on 2010-09-02 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]

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