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    dots Submission Name: My dear, come here!dots
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    Author: thelastman
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 6/5/8
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy dear, come here!dots
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    Have you seen her?

    My love, my dear.

    I heard her voice calling me-
    it felt very near.

    What did it say!

    Do you know?

    I could hear it speak-
    Save me today.


    Hey! Hey! Have you seen my angel

    see looks very beautful,

    She has eyes deeper then the
    sea,

    and she loves to be,
    with me..


    No! no! The news I didn't hear!

    Could it be,

    that they found her
    on a swing by a tree?

    Why... Why?

    Did she comitte suicide...


    Every day, you can hear me say...

    My love, my love.. Come here..

    Even though I know, that she will be,

    Never near...




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      oh my God y?
    cool but it got a sad depressing tone
    loved its simplicity even the spacing.
    nice work
    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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