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Author: girly101
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There's a hole in mind-
I long to fill it in.
I think it was my conscious,
Stolen by a friend.

I bare my teeth and growl,
Grin from ear to ear.
Inside my head I whisper,
And try so hard not to give in.

A dark mass is looming in my head,
Its stronger everyday.
I try to kill it swiftly,
But it refuses to obey.

My thoughts are no longer mine,
They hold an ancient taste.
Images of the hunt,
And of evils I have never faced.

The kill sounds sweet to me now,
And I know ill never be free.
The darkness is taking over somehow,
And its all I can see.

My body seems to be changing,
Fingers long and thin with pointed claws.
And people stray away from me,
When I walk the halls.

Those who used to torment,
hunker in fear.
And the predator within,
Grows hungry with their tears.

My eyes glint violet,
When my mind goes astray.
Now there is hardly a moment,
where my eyes are blue in a day.

My mind is no longer lacking,
Its filled up nice and snug.
With millenniums of knowledge,
Of the kill- my only drug.

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