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    dots Submission Name: Achilles Heeldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 361
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Who will remember
    The names of spent blood
    On the epitaphs and cenotaphs
    To unknown soldiers

    This centuries pile of
    Unknown heroes
    Mourned in Mockery
    As heroes all
    Die for the money

    Their legend is no longer written
    Or remembered
    Achilles

    They die in their droves and in secrecy
    Still the puppets of golden queens and kings
    Who’s petty trinket
    Was the cost of their lives it took to buy with

    Not for love
    Or for honour
    Achilles
    No not even for eternity or destiny
    Achilles

    And all the Gods you so defied
    Achilles
    In your brazen burnish of courage
    Are now those deities you so despised
    As faceless

    Behind their armouries and vaults
    In their quiet sanctities
    They smile upon
    The mimicry of their tears

    Achilles

    And where now the Iliad of legends
    Where now the memories
    In the counting currencies of terrorism
    They die in their droves
    For a cause less than noble
    Achilles

    Duped they fall
    For the cost of counting banks
    As fools and pawns upon a political map
    To appease the greed
    Of sick and psychotic queens and kings

    Still believing in the lie, they fall
    In every falsehood of spilt blood
    Contrived to deceive
    A warriors heart
    Achilles

    Who will recall
    Those names
    On the epitaphs and cenotaphs
    To bravery marked
    In the tombs of unknown soldiers

    This century of lies piled up
    On the mounds
    Of unknown women and men, forgotten heroes

    Their legend is no longer written
    Achilles
    Or remembered
    Passed and forgotten with the people who loved them
    Who will remember them

    They are the cannon fodder of avarice
    The lives wasted in the pleasures of gluttony
    They are the political means to the political ends
    Of parasites
    Who’s contempt for human life
    Writes a carnage
    Upon this Earth

    Achilles !

    The heroes fall
    In honour for those who have none
    Not for destiny
    Not for eternity
    Lead to the battle fields
    Achilles
    To die
    For a lie







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      tight ; meaning cool to dier for a lie my fave lines started from ....duped they fall... to the end, correction i feel these centuries not this centuries as in above. cool write
    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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