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    dots Submission Name: Subliminal Ignorancedots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Probably the most fictional write I've written, I can relate, myself, I guess. But this isn't exactly how things went down in "my version." (Yes, I wrote this, yet I am relating as a spectator. And by "my version" I mean personal experiences.)

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    dotsSubliminal Ignorancedots

    I swear I heard a quiver in your voice, last night
    Yet I challenged all the doubt
    As it wondered the streets of my mind
    Would be unreal to live without
    So I push the thoughts down
    To memory's aft, where I cannot find

    I noticed no passion in your words, last night
    But a hint of despair, from your troubled eyes
    And a void of silence replacing "I love you"
    I should know better than your world of lies
    But I'm too blind for that
    Couldn't imagine this world when we're through

    And when you walked away, into the dark night
    I cringed, but I couldn't imagine why
    Somewhere inside, I knew that you were gone
    And that you would soon say goodbye
    Denial can pack a punch
    When you realize, been oblivious so long

    And I didn't want to hear it
    Lie to my face instead
    Do you ever feel regret
    Crawling through your head
    Sure it stung and lingered there
    Am I not good enough for you
    What a lie, in such despair
    Far too good is much more true

    But I won't wave goodbye
    For now I'll stay
    Then with wings I'll fly
    And fade away

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