[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Autumn Ever Fallingdots

    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 635
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1349


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAutumn Ever Fallingdots

    'It's almost Fall'
    they liked to say
    pretending to keep
    summer heat at bay

    Light was turning
    darkness fed
    days got shorter
    leaves turned red

    once a leaf
    fragile and weak
    faced with choice
    a destructive streak

    I envied the birds
    soaring on valiant wing
    reaching the highest heights
    crowned beauty, freedom's king

    Deciding to jump
    to feel the thrill
    like a bird in flight
    touched with sudden chill

    heaven cried out
    to be clutched
    but at such a height
    I could only yearn to touch

    showering stars welcomed
    as they swirled by
    at a heightened pace
    I dropped through the sky

    Earth came closer
    beckoning me
    spring had sprung
    summer was freed

    before the fall
    I didn't understand
    significance of the leap
    what it meant to land

    faced the fear
    found real release
    I flew with the others
    truly at peace

    flying was falling
    in an almost controlled
    sort of fashion
    I fell through autumn
    and I fell with passion

    Submitted on 2010-09-01 13:39:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Oii there,
    I personally loved the flow of this!!! I really liked how the words were able to draw beautiful and colorful pictures in my mind. Very well done :D
    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a decent piece, the flow was a little off but the message was clear. Not bad

    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Push written by JanePlane
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Bond written by saartha
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    To written by SavedDragon
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Incubus written by monad
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Linger written by saartha




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]