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    dots Submission Name: Autumn Ever Fallingdots

    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsAutumn Ever Fallingdots

    'It's almost Fall'
    they liked to say
    pretending to keep
    summer heat at bay

    Light was turning
    darkness fed
    days got shorter
    leaves turned red

    once a leaf
    fragile and weak
    faced with choice
    a destructive streak

    I envied the birds
    soaring on valiant wing
    reaching the highest heights
    crowned beauty, freedom's king

    Deciding to jump
    to feel the thrill
    like a bird in flight
    touched with sudden chill

    heaven cried out
    to be clutched
    but at such a height
    I could only yearn to touch

    showering stars welcomed
    as they swirled by
    at a heightened pace
    I dropped through the sky

    Earth came closer
    beckoning me
    spring had sprung
    summer was freed

    before the fall
    I didn't understand
    significance of the leap
    what it meant to land

    faced the fear
    found real release
    I flew with the others
    truly at peace

    flying was falling
    in an almost controlled
    sort of fashion
    I fell through autumn
    and I fell with passion

    Submitted on 2010-09-01 13:39:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oii there,
    I personally loved the flow of this!!! I really liked how the words were able to draw beautiful and colorful pictures in my mind. Very well done :D
    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a decent piece, the flow was a little off but the message was clear. Not bad

    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]

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