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    dots Submission Name: No one deserves a cheatdots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       this is a quick poem based on how my ex thought he was worth two girls, how he thought he could brake me, and how i just laughed and walked away.


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    dotsNo one deserves a cheatdots
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    Look at you,
    Look at me
    we are as different as
    one can be.

    Once two lovers,
    with not a care in the world,
    once with strong close
    passion that we thought wouldn't die.

    Even though it was long ago,
    I am not one to forget.
    Once so sweet and sincere,
    only to turn to cold glares.

    All those times,
    you went behind my back.
    You must have thought
    you made me weaker.

    Thought you became stronger,
    that you were worth
    more than one girl,
    Don't be so stupid.

    I don't need your foolish games,
    I don't need your childish ways.
    Cause I'm going to smile and walk away,
    and tell you that no one deserves a cheat.





    Submitted on 2010-09-01 18:38:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's telling em! Excellent vent, and a good philosophical example as well. No one has to put up with a cheat, and walking away is the best remedy!
    | Posted on 2010-09-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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