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    dots Submission Name: She Speaks of Nonsensedots

    Author: Syn
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    dotsShe Speaks of Nonsensedots

    oh-so-tense in my head
    feels more than half-dead
    i pinch my skin & yet all i see
    is shooting daggers straight at me

    it doesn't make sense
    this doesn't make sense
    the scope is immense i can't take the suspense & i don't like surprises & there's too many rhymes, too many ideals too easy to compromise...

    i could run & try to hold onto
    or i could feel this pain & cry, too
    the answer is something i can't touch
    why am i able to hurt me so much?

    *mmmmmmm mmmmmmmmm*

    indeed i live much too awkwardly
    indeed i can't handle, well, anything
    effectively lost & spinning (she's spinning)

    i talk in third person so i don't feel alone
    what that says about me, i don't care to know
    misinterpret this; i can barely speak anyway-
    i whisper these screams & can't even explain...

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      As a martial artist my screams have a special meaning, take note I won't be abiding these discrepancies. I try to be dynamically aggressive, I must defeat!! Even when I look in the mirror it sometimes feels this way.

    | Posted on 2012-09-13 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely fantastic! It's like you ripped the thoughts right out of my mind. Sometimes the creative imagination isn't such a wonderful place.
    | Posted on 2011-03-01 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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