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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Rant/Society
    Total Views: 712
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I'm tired of it all I am just sick and tired


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    Longing to know a life
    where I am not just barely making it
    Wishing for more money
    No not massive amounts
    Simply a life where I do not "have" to work two jobs
    I am beat to core of my core
    I am broken but I have no one to blame but myself
    I cannot sleep
    I worry if this month will be as the last
    My account showing NEGATIVE balance

    Why are we a society who will raise gas prices on a daily bases
    Common house hold prices increase without a second thought
    Medical bills will go to a creditor when your VERY first time a payment is late

    Yet we are NOT a society who realizes...
    Cost of living has drastically raised!
    A dollar simply does not go as far as it use to

    Negative addicting products pray on people such as myself
    Whom are struggle to make ends meet
    Cigarettes, chew, energy drinks
    Costly nevertheless I will pay for them
    BECAUSE I NEED THEM

    Where have they went wrong?
    Or am I the one in the wrong?

    College is not cheep for this I need to work EVEN more

    HOW

    I ask you…

    HOW




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      wow this transition,is great!gone for a wee and long while,back now yeah i missed your work,and i think it would be best as a tag on my shelf ...what shelf my faves list
    of course
    | Posted on 2010-10-17 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow !!!!.. i wish i was dumb - then i wouldn't UNDERSTAND! - it hurts to know . [things like this. becuz there so true]

    good write..... good read this is going on my fav list!!

    fav line:
    Longing to know a life
    where I am not just barely making it...
    { so FuK-N powerful !! ) just this line alone makes me start crying ...

    ~Robbie
    | Posted on 2010-09-03 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      My mom was just explaining what you did here.Only bc she's in her early fifties.Have I ever told you that I like this? Had I ever told you why I love this.I like it bc you explain and break down, "Your way".Your letting us know why we as of yourself spend money on the things we have to have that get us by, when we could be using that money for other things.Simply because

    BECAUSE I NEED THEM

    Here's why I love it.*Tries to soak in the atmosphere*.When it gets to the point in this [censored] country where they YOUNG are telling you that [censored] is bad and ridiculous out here from an economical standpoint.Then your hearing it from YOUNG ppl who know wtf is going on bc their not only watching the expenses of the livelihood but more so their (We're) looking at prices of items.I believe as of us being young, marketers kinda know what ppl want so they make more things.Games,Dating services,Nightlife,items to take care of children that so many young ppl have.So what does this do.It forces us to go work harder and end up basically exhausted that we pass out on the bed or couch the minute after we close the door.Your description of the piece is even related to masses of young (Us) as of being sick and [censored] tired.But ask yourself: Could I have it any worse than this? I want you to be proud of who you are and what you can do in the work force.More importantly I know you prolly deal with BS at one of your job.I want you to be comfortable without worry.The biggest problem for us as the YOUNG.Is that we're balancing it out at all once, everything with our jobs, family life, friends,money,taking care of yourself,etc etc.I don't believe we'll be able to relax unless we go harder forwards establishing ourselves where we WANT to be living it good the way we always wanted it.As far as you getting out of the situation of having two jobs but wanting one just to make the same amount of dough as you did of both.Keep your eye open for career opportunities, try not to take everything in at once.Like having a job problem and personal matter your thinking and stressing on at the exact same time.Don't do that, focus on one thing after another.Because sometimes you can't multitasks life situations and aspects if your trying to establish yourself and make to the very place you dream of while your at your job.I love this J FAV.This is the young persons anger, concern and you WANT some fucking answers NOW.Just take it easy as possible and be optimistic when the time is ready and you may get a blessing.I know you'll do what yopu feel you must to get away from all the madness.

    RG

    BTW there needs to be more comments and thoughts on this.You can't ignore something like this when your young.IT NEEDS MORE COMMENTS

    | Posted on 2010-09-02 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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