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    dots Submission Name: Passiondots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 832
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1308



    Description:
       He wanted me to write a happy poem about him...I tried.


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    dotsPassiondots
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    I can't stop smiling
    Jolts from head to toe
    Shivers down my spine
    I won't just let this go

    I can't believe it happened
    Simpler than I'd thought
    I'm holding on tight
    Because our love can't just be forgot

    I fell head first
    And I don't want to get back up
    Being close to you means safety
    Sweet strength and love

    I could reach up to the sky
    And not sleep for months
    I could eat a grocery store
    And climb a million stairs

    I could catch the stars
    Smile straight in to the sun
    Because you are back in my life
    I don't know how I ever went wrong

    You are perfection
    Bottled up in an angel
    Glimpses shine forth in your smile
    Ear to ear its like heaven

    Your hands which hold me
    Tell stories of laughter
    Your glance
    Can lift a cloud from rain

    You are forever
    Come to save me from myself
    You are everything I was missing
    For as long as I can remember

    You wanted a happy poem
    I don't know how well it went
    I just wanted to tell you I love you
    Finally things make sense.




    Submitted on 2010-09-03 08:19:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I am glad that after eating a grocery store you had the sense to climb a million stairs!
    It sounds to me like you have it bad!
    Lucky for you bad is good at least for now.
    Anyway this is an old post so I wonder how
    is that love thing holding up? I sure hope that when I get in my time machine love will still be rocking your
    when I end up!
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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