Wow very deep and the display of confusion.This was good read aloud.I think it would be cool upsied down too.Just me though.The ending at the beginning sorta thing.The mention of OCD makes me ponder on your subject more
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I thin the tone is very emotional. Or if that's too obvious I should say that it's dramatic, but to be honest the sincerity kind of hooks you in. There's a lot of thought put into this ad I like the philosophical side, it's got this romantic quality of only wanting the "now" but afraid of both change and stagnation. The universe goes on for ever or it doesn't, finite or infinite I think we just want to be here in the now, both prospects seem daunting to me. But yeah I like this a lot, I think as this poem goes it's pretty well finished as in I wouldn't add to it etc. But in future or in a different poem i wouldn't mind some more material imagery, I mean it wouldn't work with this poem but I'd like to see how you apply yourself to something more solid. This obviously woks because it's kind of intangible. Just my thoughts anyhoo. I can't remember when i added you to my stalk list but I sometimes take a gander at your poems. I don't know why, I suppose it's cos they're not pretentious and they just go with their own thing. I don't get on ES much myself anymore but seeing as I was on i thought I'd comment.