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    dots Submission Name: Consciousness is Observable dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 349
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsConsciousness is Observable dots

    You think all of this exists outside of you
    Something to aspire to

    You suspect it all might be alien
    The only E.T here, is you

    You ponder some kind of secret agenda
    Illuminati conspiracies
    With humankind bent in their slavery

    All of it maybe true
    But none of it is you

    You wonder if you are universal
    And wonder how you are so individual
    And what identity can there be, which makes me, me

    You think all of this exists, outside of you
    Christ consciousness
    Something to inspire to

    While connection after connection
    Tries to tell you
    Inside you, inside you, inside you

    Do you think the molecules of water
    Make their structure in some kind of random order

    Were the spirals repeating through every level
    Galactic arms and dualities of vortex d.n.a
    And chaos theory just a fantasy


    Do you imagine this is just some phantasm
    Of a human psyche which so desperately clings
    To some purpose

    While every explanation of your existence
    Orientates onto a physical plane
    Which requires work for you to support

    And all the poems and songs of love
    Are just the edifications of dreamers
    Of an art we had; but somehow lost

    You think all of this, exists, outside of you
    That your alien preponderance for looking at stars
    Is nothing to remind you

    While connection after connection
    Tries to tell you
    All of you, are all, inside, inside of you, inside you

    Inside you, inside you, inside you

    The potency of the present
    Precedes in an action made; without thought
    And faith in yourself, is true faith in God

    The world is waiting for one truly connected spark
    And knowing is the gift of miracles
    To perform

    It could be anyone
    It could be you
    Who catches the light and encompasses


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