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    dots Submission Name: Your not by my sidedots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsYour not by my sidedots

    Every tear I cried,
    I cried because I was convinced.
    I was sure I was to blame.
    I looked at your picture and the memories came.
    All the tears came pouring out.
    The moments as a little girl,
    where you were my mountain,
    where you were my everything,
    where i meant the world to you.
    Until everything changed,
    when she came along.
    I was just a last thought.
    Where I felt pushed into the dark.
    Now I cry because somethings not right.
    I look to my side and your not there.

    Submitted on 2010-09-05 20:14:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem conveys the hollow mood of loneliness and abandonment. How painful it is to have to share a loved parent with a newcomer who has won their affection and love. Your poem does a good job of conveying this feeling which we have all had at one time or another.
    | Posted on 2010-09-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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