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    dots Submission Name: Snowdots
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    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    dotsSnowdots
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    The snow in the Alaskan arctic really is quite unusual as it falls. As I’m from Washington, a much more wet area, I’m used to freezing clumps of rain-things dropping on my head and shoulders as I duck for cover.
    Alaska really is quite a different experience, though. It often comes down slowly, but occasionally you see a huge downfall of this dry snow at once. It even sparkles as it catches the light, and the flakes are tiny instead of big and clumpy, making it appear as though tiny, glittering crystals are gracing your presence as you walk outside the well-lit semi-wilderness. I was walking along the path to my home, surrounded by trees as well as street lamps, with a perfect view of the mountains, when the snow hit. Slowly at first, but quickly gathering speed, and suddenly I was in the middle of a snowfall. But it was nothing like the unpleasant experience of snow I’m used to in Washington; the flakes were gentle as they covered my winter coat. Suddenly my outfit changed from black to white. I felt like dancing. I stuck my tongue out into the fall, twirled in a circle, and wished more than anything that somebody could tell me, at that moment, that I was beautiful.




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       I'm thinking Washington should be split, the east and west of it are so different, but then we'd get stuck with two states called "East Washington" and "West Washington" and that just sounds ridiculous. By your description (and by most people's, really) I'm guessing you're from western Washington. East of the cascades it gets dry as a bone and the snow can be damn near intolerable for the majority of the year, but it is beautiful, like frosting.

    The affects of the snow on your mentality and sense of wonder reminded me both of Alaska and where I grew up in Washington. It's usually that first big snow that makes the world feel hushed, padded, and kind of like you're all alone, but not in a lonely way. It's magical. You've captured that in this short bit of prose, and I like the contrast you provided with your previous experience of snow. It makes one realize that one thing in one place can be quite another somewhere else, and one shouldn't be too hasty to come to conclusions.

    Maybe that's why eskimos have so many words for snow. It's forms are endless.

    I would like to see what more you could bring out in this. I feel like all the bones are there, they just need a little more muscle and skin -- not much, just a touch more. But then again, it's quite satisfying as is, too.

    -Emeya
    | Posted on 2010-09-08 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]


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