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    dots Submission Name: Miracle/Ghost of My Pastdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
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       A letter from myex someone i loved and was with for 4yr almost married him now... this


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    dotsMiracle/Ghost of My Pastdots
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    How did you get from the miracle of my life
    To the ghost of my past
    Who will forever haunt me?

    You have disturbed my life
    A life I wish to live without you

    Ive stopped, dead in my tracks
    A letter written by you
    Addressed me ME

    A miracle in my life you once were
    Now a doorway to my past.
    I wish for you to not haunt me

    Longing to be strong enough to keep walking
    Passing that doorway

    You were once my savor
    My Night in Shining Amor

    Now you are purely the opposite
    Turn Around
    Walk Away
    I cannot have any part of this...Any part of you




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      This is funny cause I imagine you closing and slamming the door back shut when something haunting tries to creep back in.I think a lot of ppl are like this when it coes to their demons or ghost of the past that we don't want parts of anymore.Savor should have been savior though lol.It's all good anyway because I knew what you meant,so if theres a misprint then most likely I can still catch on.It says "I've moved on and am a new person.You are not forgotten but the memories of you are ugh." My fav part which came off very strong to me is the last stanza.It's you commanding a spirit of unhappiness to go back to it own existence.It's a portrait of a woman pushing a ghost out of her bedroom,telling it to [censored] off.Lol I hope that I walways see where your coming from, not that it's hard.

    "I cannot have any part of this...Any part of you."
    When I say this over and over from reading the piece.I think of a woman having the power to either destroy or cast out the terrible things in her life, emotionally, spiritually, physically list goes on.So I believe it's a mysterious picture but you can still break it down into two pieces for understanding.
    1.You
    2.What was once a miracle but wound up devoured and crawls back to you trying to hold on like an unwanted leach.
    The Message is clear for me.
    Cast out whatever in you that you feel is disturbing you internally.Do everything in your power to fight it off.Wether they nightmares,arguments,encounters with ghost.And I do believe in ghost so this one here is okay. Hope things are good J *Hugs* Peace&Inspiration

    RG
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