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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 584



    Description:
       wrote this in jail. talking to alot of people about thier ex's got me to thinking. everyone can relate to being so much in love but after the break up, its never the same. hope you all enjoy it in one way or another.

    btw, couldnt think of a title, got any ideas just shoot em at me


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    please... dont look at me,
    those eyes will only judge.
    they will never understand,
    or even choose to do such.
    i beg you, dont speak to me,
    you have such an angelic voice,
    but with such cruel words...
    it drives my mind so sick.
    i will try to avoid your touch,
    it brings memories of bliss.
    the time i was considered happy,
    but its now a time that dosent exist.
    the past is in the past, my dear.
    try not to bring it up again.
    that was once my heaven,
    but now, its just a gloomy den.




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