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    dots Submission Name: questionsdots
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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       i also wrote this in jail.
    how ironic that the guy that my (ex)girlfriend left me for was in there with me.
    seeing as how i have a habit of getting the ladies i love taken away from me, i wrote this.

    to be honest, i left out the final part to this. i felt it wasnt needed to get my point across. however, if you for some reason want to read it just send me a PM and ill gladly send it.


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    can you truly love her more than i do?
    can you explain why she chose you?!
    can you prove to me you\'re not a fake?
    can you show me she didnt make a mistake?

    can you look into her eyes,
    and tell her she\'s all you need?
    can you take her hand into yours,
    and forget that you have to breath?
    have you held her close and tight,
    because your afraid to let go?
    do you love her for being herself,
    never as a trophy for show?
    are you capable of giving the respect
    that she yearns for and deserves?
    and can i actually take your word
    and trust that she'll NEVER be hurt?

    she's beautiful. treat her as such.




    Submitted on 2010-09-09 09:57:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Damn that was pretty cool
    I like the flow of it, and it's straight to the point

    if you're speaking of a personal experience, then trust me i've been there
    it's tough it really is, but you'll pull through
    there have been several girls I thought I couldn't live w/o
    turns out I'm just very emotional

    good write
    stay positive
    -ODF
    | Posted on 2010-09-09 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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