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    dots Submission Name: Illusions Intricate Detaildots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Am I sleeping

    Though the daylight in a thousand eyes
    Finds me transfixed upon a dream

    Am I sleeping

    In a world of thought
    Mesmerisms in blindness
    The pre-ordained retina of a reality

    Am I sleeping

    And together with the march of zombies
    Seeing nothing
    Calling nothing; everything
    But a mere façade
    A varnished lustre of such a gossamer veils
    That to part the pair beneath its steel
    Would seem; impossible

    Am I sleeping

    And with each and every daybreaks re-initiation
    I fall from grace
    I fall each day from Eden
    To sleep again
    In a perpetual world
    Defined by habits perception

    Am I sleeping

    Fixed upon a multitudinous mass of meaningless intricate detail
    While the leaves of trees try
    Try with all their heart
    To speak to me

    “We, in expressions of bark and trunk
    are here in our seasons to capture the sun
    and bring the purpose of the hidden root
    to the magnificence of its fruit
    we are one”

    Am I sleeping

    Even while the ages are yawning and stretching
    Their breath expanding
    Deep within this somnolent

    Irritation and frustration
    Burns and tosses the ashes
    Fitful against the pillow of my rest
    To drag from this heady stupor
    To lift from this malaise

    Open my eyes
    And awake

    I am sleeping

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