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    dots Submission Name: Repeatdots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 365
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    Here is the truth:

    I know your name,
    But in two weeks I'll probably
    Never see you again.
    We'll almost certainly kiss
    We will cuddle for hours,
    You'll whisper sweet nothings
    And we'll taunt desires.
    But in two weeks I'll probably
    Never see you again.
    For now, your special
    Buy me flowers, make me wings
    Fly to heaven, without strings
    For now we will hold hands
    Dance on clouds
    Life is in our hands,
    We have the powers.
    But in two weeks you'll just be another
    On the list of nameless faces
    "Yes, I dated him before, but now,
    I can't remember why or when.




    Submitted on 2010-09-10 18:31:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Woooo Cold but thats the way it goes sometimes in the world of hotseats to put someone in if their qualified.I think it's a little revealing of who you are as a person as far as your dating life goes if th is is true in any way to you the writer.I sense tiredness in the title as in something not quite right that keeps repeating with the wish that it will go away and bring the real deal already/I think it's cold but calculated too.The beginning is assumptions with we'll do this and that type of thing.I just kinda seems like there this anticipation of disappointment that you speak of.It's okay.

    RG
    | Posted on 2010-09-16 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      UMM Same [censored] different day... Or is it the same [censored]in day with different [censored]. anyway, I feel you on that one. I liked it. it was short, simple, deep yet right to the point. cool.
    | Posted on 2010-09-10 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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