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    dots Submission Name: New Storydots

    Author: xBoyCrazieeXXXF
    ASL Info:    15/Female/New York
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 0/0/19
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Story/Lostfriend
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       This story is about a young lady telling some kids a story every time she visits the orphanage, which is only twice a week. While telling the story, she teaches the kids about life and how not to give up on something that you really want.

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    "Come on kids, let me tell you all a story." said a black haired woman.

    "Ok!" all the children ran over to the woman.

    The young lady had long black hair and dark brown eyes. She was very beautiful with small rosy cheeks and a warm smile. She was tall and slim, weighing only 120 pounds. She sat down on a stool and the kids took a seat on the small pink carpet laid over the floor. The lady would come to the orphanage twice every week to read to the children and take care of them. She loved the children and they all loved her.

    "Which story will you be reading this time?" a small browned haired girl asked.

    "Actually, this time I decided to tell you a story, rather than read one." the lady answered.

    "What's it about?" a little boy with black hair asked.

    "Well, it's about a girl and a boy-"

    "So, it's a love story?" a blonde headed girl interrupted.

    "You could say that. Shall I begin?"

    "Yes." The kids quieted down and the lady began her story.

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