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    dots Submission Name: I'm not buying...dots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI'm not buying...dots
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    I won’t buy into what you’re selling.
    A knock at the door says you want me
    But for what? Why are you really here
    At my door, when you could be at home,
    Tucked in by a wife; living up the good life?

    I won’t buy into what you’re selling.
    But I can’t lie your sales pitch is good.
    A transparent transaction, you promised;
    And yet, I don’t believe your words match
    Your actions. The situation remains muddled.

    I won’t buy into what you’re selling
    It’s not worth my time; it’s not worth it
    But you’re knocking at my door, you claim
    Because you want me; because you need me
    And it sounds quite tempting, like most fiction.

    I said I won’t buy what you’re selling-
    But I may listen, and I may try on a line or two…




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