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    dots Submission Name: Intoxicationdots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 660
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    Description:
       Ten reasons of death

    1. Old age
    2. Wrath
    3. solitude
    4. Emptiness
    5. Despair
    6. Destruction
    7. Intoxication
    8. Insanity
    9. Greed
    10. Sacrifice

    Seventh...Breath...Breath....shh

    Picture this as if you have taken a poison that forces you to stop breathing. You near a window where the sunset is shining upon. Slowly I move towards death.


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    My body...Wake up...Can I move...?

    I see now...I see real darkness in light,
    Something is wrong, What is it?
    A sense of pain without it,
    but pain all over.

    How true that I can no longer move,
    My limbs they shake,
    My eyes they wake up to the sky
    trying to see all that it can.

    Oh...Was that my breath,
    how sweet was it to breath one more time.
    Oh...Was that my sweat
    how adoring was it to smell one more time.

    I see now...I see real light in darkness,
    Is that GOD? Am I being erased?
    I lived a life did I not?
    Am I dreaming for real.

    Breath...
    Goodbye my Maya...Goodbye cruel world...
    I cried....All my life....




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      I work in a hospital, in an ER. Im the little nurse assistant who brings blankets and wraps ankles with ace bandages. I had a fellow come in for suspected overdose. He had a forehead similar to yours. His speech was slurred. When I was hooking him up to heart monitor I thought it strange that is chest was shaved. I made a little joke that he didn't have to worry about going through the pain of getting a wax job as I placed the cardiac leads. He glanced down, his eyes looking pitiful at the stubble of a bad shave job. He slurred, " I shaved my chest for this chick, and she still didn't want me." The nurse was in the room and said, "Is that the reason you took so many Xanax? Over a girl?" He just nodded. It's sad what some people will end their life for when there is so much to live for.
    | Posted on 2010-09-12 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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