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    dots Submission Name: The Purpose of Pointlessdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Purpose of Pointlessdots

    While seven billion pairs of eyes
    Stare into the madness of the dream
    And the horrors heaped in conscience
    On the bloody swathes left in conflict
    As mankind’s isolation
    Leaves them nothing but the destruction
    Of frustrated agonies
    Burden for the richest and the paupers
    In the abundance of their wealth
    Turn want to hate
    And hate upon itself

    As seven billion pairs of eyes
    Stare into the madness they contrived
    Desperate to catch the moment
    And fill it with the ticky-tac
    Of emptiness
    Somehow has a purpose
    Other than the pointless
    Struggle to survive
    In a single drop of life
    And seven billion pairs of eyes
    Wonder if they are alive

    Drowning out the silence of the eternal voice
    The whispering the words of God are lost
    Behind the clamour of their thoughts
    And another meaningless advertisement
    Gives them a reason to exist
    Constricted by their seconds
    Fulfilling the agenda of the trap
    Beguiled by jingoisms freedom
    And die inside the prison
    Never knowing for a moment
    How easily they could have lived

    And there they stand upon the brink
    Upon the leap
    There waits the love
    They wish they had
    Aching to be freed
    There is nothing; nothing else they need

    And seven billion pairs of eyes
    Stare with their surprise
    Into the beauty of their dream

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