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Love at first sight


Author: Ramneet
ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
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I have written this poem for my son, Jyotsahib. He is a cutie and a sweet heart.


Love at first sight



Beautiful eyes
Million dollar smile
Who’s that guy
It’s Jyotsahib
Lovely Boy
Kuchu Guy.

Tender tender skin
Small small hands
Small small feet
Who’s that guy
It’s Jyotsahib
Lovely Boy
Kuchu Guy.

God’s benevolence
Happiness of everyday
Joy of our lives
Who’s that guy
It’s Jyotsahib
Lovely Boy
Kuchu Guy.

Prince Charming
He likes monkeys
He is like a monkey
Jumping all the time
Who’s that guy
It’s Jyotsahib
Lovely Boy
Kuchu Guy.

Play time is fun
Story time is fun
Bathing time is fun
World around him is fun
Who’s that guy
It’s Jyotsahib
Lovely Boy
Kuchu Guy.




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  Awesome,I can imagine about jyotsahib after reading this wonderful poem about childish behaviour of lovely boy.
| Posted on 2012-01-21 00:00:00 | by jasguru | [ Reply to This ]
  I think some is in love with their baby boy, which is exactly as it should be! A wonderful, wonderful and loving poem! I just loved it!!!
| Posted on 2011-06-02 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can picture a handsome and happy boy from your lovely poem.
| Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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