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    dots Submission Name: Love at first sightdots

    Author: Ramneet
    ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 265/107/53
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I have written this poem for my son, Jyotsahib. He is a cutie and a sweet heart.

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    dotsLove at first sightdots

    Beautiful eyes
    Million dollar smile
    Who’s that guy
    It’s Jyotsahib
    Lovely Boy
    Kuchu Guy.

    Tender tender skin
    Small small hands
    Small small feet
    Who’s that guy
    It’s Jyotsahib
    Lovely Boy
    Kuchu Guy.

    God’s benevolence
    Happiness of everyday
    Joy of our lives
    Who’s that guy
    It’s Jyotsahib
    Lovely Boy
    Kuchu Guy.

    Prince Charming
    He likes monkeys
    He is like a monkey
    Jumping all the time
    Who’s that guy
    It’s Jyotsahib
    Lovely Boy
    Kuchu Guy.

    Play time is fun
    Story time is fun
    Bathing time is fun
    World around him is fun
    Who’s that guy
    It’s Jyotsahib
    Lovely Boy
    Kuchu Guy.

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    ||| Comments |||
      Awesome,I can imagine about jyotsahib after reading this wonderful poem about childish behaviour of lovely boy.
    | Posted on 2012-01-21 00:00:00 | by jasguru | [ Reply to This ]
      I think some is in love with their baby boy, which is exactly as it should be! A wonderful, wonderful and loving poem! I just loved it!!!
    | Posted on 2011-06-02 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can picture a handsome and happy boy from your lovely poem.
    | Posted on 2011-02-12 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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