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    dots Submission Name: Sidesdots
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    Author: nolram
    ASL Info:    29/M
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 58/61/33
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 546
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 435



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    I want you to know I never felt anything like what I wrote about here, for anyone else.


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    dotsSidesdots
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    When no one is on your side
    Suicide seems tame
    When no one is in your life
    life and death are all the same
    When someone shows you love and takes it all away
    That's a destruction that has no name
    A culture disposes of used people
    like commodities from a fun weekend
    The world will witness endless evil
    as long as beings are trash and electronics are friends




    Submitted on 2010-09-12 04:23:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This took a pretty dramatic turn
    from a spot on view of the world
    to a confession
    I can say that I did enjoy reading it
    if it was something more than a note to that person
    may I suggest a few more poetic devices
    and those lines when you were like "those poems that I wrote for other girls........"
    that one was a major turn off
    but all in all this is a pretty good write
    | Posted on 2010-09-12 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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