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    dots Submission Name: It's your turn to paydots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsIt's your turn to paydots

    Push me around and yell as loud
    as you can until I cry frightened for
    what happens next. laugh as pain
    rips across my face.

    Watch in awe as I take
    every hit without a fight
    or word to say. Then find it
    easy to take me down.

    See the pain in my eyes,
    years of my childhood, I lost
    to you. Pushed to fast into the
    world in which I was not prepared.

    What you neglected to see
    was that I held back too much,
    and now it's your turn to pay,
    As I glare and walk away.

    I walk away with a new sense
    of life, willing to re-live what I had
    lost. Sadly your deed lives strong
    within my memory and the anger still thrives.

    Yours is soon to come...

    Submitted on 2010-09-13 19:54:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh, a sad and very poignant penning here about an abusive childhood, well done write, as it conjures emotion extremely well in the reader... this fine work! Michael
    | Posted on 2010-10-11 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a description of what I went through seven years ago. This scar I carry is long faded and forgotten. Hopefully yours fades as well. Nice write btw. Its really deep and well worded. Perhaps a different stanza or a different prose?
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by Slayer X9000 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey this was good to the person its written for there seems to be a strong message hoping they read it
    well done
    | Posted on 2010-09-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      looking back in alott peoples lives you can see the pain throught out this i like it
    | Posted on 2010-09-14 00:00:00 | by Rubesangel | [ Reply to This ]

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