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    dots Submission Name: I Felldots

    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI Felldots

    Its the middle of the day,
    And the time seems too slow.
    As I reminisce on the past,
    My feelings begin to grow.
    I believe in the latter,
    The ways people can change.
    Lost in my own little world,
    Everything seems deranged.

    I've lost all my faith,
    or so it would seem.
    Even when I look in your eyes,
    And see that beautiful gleam.
    This torment of pain
    Will always haunt.
    And our past in vain,
    Will forever taunt.

    If those words are real,
    Then I was a fool.
    In all things lust,
    I broke my only rule.
    Never to fall,
    And never to hurt.
    But in the end,
    My heart was burnt.

    Submitted on 2010-09-14 14:45:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this! This write flows so well. One promise you cant make to yourself ever -not to fall. Its out of our control.

    | Posted on 2010-09-19 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      why is it that your poems are alwys kick ass?
    way to rock.
    | Posted on 2010-09-18 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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