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I Fell

Author: KindredSpirit
ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
Elite Ratio:    2 - 54 /139 /174
Words: 115
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I Fell

Its the middle of the day,
And the time seems too slow.
As I reminisce on the past,
My feelings begin to grow.
I believe in the latter,
The ways people can change.
Lost in my own little world,
Everything seems deranged.

I've lost all my faith,
or so it would seem.
Even when I look in your eyes,
And see that beautiful gleam.
This torment of pain
Will always haunt.
And our past in vain,
Will forever taunt.

If those words are real,
Then I was a fool.
In all things lust,
I broke my only rule.
Never to fall,
And never to hurt.
But in the end,
My heart was burnt.

Submitted on 2010-09-14 14:45:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this! This write flows so well. One promise you cant make to yourself ever -not to fall. Its out of our control.

| Posted on 2010-09-19 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  why is it that your poems are alwys kick ass?
way to rock.
| Posted on 2010-09-18 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

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