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    dots Submission Name: Daviddots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/What you did
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       no longer with him but i my as well be with the way i am thinking


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    dotsDaviddots
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    All those multi colored pills,
    they haunt me.
    The warm feeling rushing within my veins,
    as you injected me with those drugs.
    My body aches for them!

    I now lye in a bed with a different Man.
    Now living a different life.

    Kicked my habit cold turkey!!!
    But I can't say I don't get those urges

    Laying in bed my body is beat,
    yet my mind is wide awake.
    Going back through old archives of memories
    Closing my eyes only make them that more vivid!

    I need to forget you
    I need to move on

    But I cannot do this for my mind will not allow me to




    Submitted on 2010-09-15 08:21:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very rich and beautiful --- wow .. very good write --- ummm can i get a Encore .../. lol ...

    bloodstone

    keep writing
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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