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    dots Submission Name: Apple With A Wormdots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Satire
    Total Views: 826
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsApple With A Wormdots
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    What did you expect? We are transfer sheets, bleeding on to each other in the dark.

    I would rather scribble on my printer paper with colored sharpies

    Carving slanted lines, running out of room around the corners

    Stand and watch my superstitious delights with a puzzled grin, I'm used to that look.

    Write to survive, create to take another breath. The mantra is engraved in me now.

    Everything is personal in this scope, nothing left dim in the wake of the ink's light

    I could waste days to create nothing of substance while my emotions bleed out in scattered thoughts

    Stuttered ideas blot the pages in humorous decor, and it would never matter if you connected the dots

    My dots, my rules.

    The best part has yet to come out, but the urgency to surface is driving these fingers to cramp

    Seven notebooks later and what may I offer you? Pieces of my childhood, broken relationship ventilation to air out the cobwebs

    The pills may focus my mind but not my idling hands.

    Tears for the saddest truths; don't give me that look. Have you never cried for what you have read?

    Close off the valves, this heart is defective. The disgrace feels and bleeds to easily at a glance.

    Return to sender, the letter is repetitive.

    Soothing misinformation, the caricatures are well placed in unseen, unpolished glory.

    You will know when I write of you, if it ever sees the light of day again.




    Submitted on 2010-09-16 11:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh my.. I just fel in love with your writing, such wonderful thoughts you have! I particulary like the writing to survive part because I can relate to that, also the stanza about seven notebooks. Yes, Yes I like, nicely written :)

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-09-28 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      as the worm kissed the apple
    her skin blushed and split
    then the core shed its flesh
    and the worm's love with it
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the title, good draw. The thoughts are entertaining and then provoking of interest, having real personality and history. It grows on you. Cool. Almost like "I am this person, or have been". How many notebooks does it take?
    | Posted on 2010-09-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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