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    dots Submission Name: I don't go homedots

    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI don't go homedots

    I don't go home
    I set out to be awake in my journey and it takes me...
    Takes me everywhere, and right here beneath my fingers
    Every fragment of your skin is a step in the right direction
    Perdition or salvation, they are but the same
    Under the lights of the fireflies, and the whispers in the air

    I don't go home
    And you tell me of this world, you talk though your lips are bitten
    Almost sounding perplexed with the ability to make them flee
    And I know I'm not alone in the deafening void of matter
    Here where my body and humility collide with the ground
    And I can feel not one but billions of punching, burning...hearts

    I don't go home
    And not the darkest night could extinguish the light cast
    Upon my secrets laid bare to rest from the defeating silence
    In which I have withered like a flower without water
    And a man with no love left to find his calm in the desert storms
    But now you know me, now you can touch me without touching

    I don't go home
    And I would never leave you here afraid that your eyes might empty
    Staggered with the burden of frightening thoughts that hurt you
    As they corrode through the walls erected by uninsightful reality
    But now and then again we are both afraid of the consequential life
    For there is no life in it after all nor do the stars shine right

    So I don't go home

    Submitted on 2010-09-16 12:27:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your various imagery makes me stop and wonder at its originality. While I have difficulty understanding the overall direction, I still like the journey. I have a good feeling when the trip is over although I am certain that I don't understand all that was there.
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads like the mood of a semi-conscious dream where Home, instead of being a cherished place with happy memories, is instead, haunted by a threat too dreadful to go home to; memories too sad to face. It seems to leave its' principal to seek solace in an uncaring and cold world that is dangerous and loveless!

    Your poetry is brilliant, but so complex for a simpleton like me to interpret. I want so to comment, but am dreadfully afraid that I have missed the meaning entirely!
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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