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    dots Submission Name: I wantdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsI wantdots
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    I am a sound breaking echo
    And you come to visit my dreams
    Pushing through with violence
    But knowing nothing of strength
    So I tear at your loins and feed on your darkness
    And you stumble
    And I prevail

    You're a manikin now
    To a single dry colored expression
    I scratch and you writhe
    And I force you into stuttering ecstasy...incredulous
    As you are driven into a wall and my hands begin to bleed
    But you give in just to get what you want -
    You cut me

    My scream breaks the steel in the replay of shadows
    In the whine of the night
    Crashing where it shouldn't
    Down the rushing encumbrance of your crotch
    In a single heartbeat
    Crawling with the burn
    And the hunger to taste

    The candlelight shimmers at the tip of your lips
    And you want me to drink
    Already drunk on your pupils
    I let you burn the world into my neck
    And there it ends
    With wrenchfull dilated velocity,
    A tremble and brutality

    I want...




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      You make me feel the experience of your passion. As always I am taken in by your imagery. The pain references intensify the passion rather than act as a reference to physical pain.
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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