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Author: Porcelaine
ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880 /703 /256
Words: 183
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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I want



I am a sound breaking echo
And you come to visit my dreams
Pushing through with violence
But knowing nothing of strength
So I tear at your loins and feed on your darkness
And you stumble
And I prevail

You're a manikin now
To a single dry colored expression
I scratch and you writhe
And I force you into stuttering ecstasy...incredulous
As you are driven into a wall and my hands begin to bleed
But you give in just to get what you want -
You cut me

My scream breaks the steel in the replay of shadows
In the whine of the night
Crashing where it shouldn't
Down the rushing encumbrance of your crotch
In a single heartbeat
Crawling with the burn
And the hunger to taste

The candlelight shimmers at the tip of your lips
And you want me to drink
Already drunk on your pupils
I let you burn the world into my neck
And there it ends
With wrenchfull dilated velocity,
A tremble and brutality

I want...




Submitted on 2010-09-16 13:05:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You make me feel the experience of your passion. As always I am taken in by your imagery. The pain references intensify the passion rather than act as a reference to physical pain.
| Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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