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    dots Submission Name: For My Familydots

    Author: stefhy
    ASL Info:    21/f/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 165/83/37
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 393
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Death in general is something hard to grasp and understand - never mind accept. This is for my family, and other families alike. May their healing process be a strengthening one.
    I know it's REALLY rough, but to be honest, it's about as fresh as it comes and I think I might appreciate the fact that it's not edited twelve times over a little later on when I go to fix it...

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    dotsFor My Familydots

    For such a simple act, your smile did us wonders
    And though we cannot watch it grow, it will never sunder
    Because your heart is part of ours, and your soul within us all
    The smile and laugh we know, lives in memories we recall.
    You've held our hand and walked us, further than we knew
    But now we've made it far enough, we know what we must do.
    You're leaving us so sweetly, to the place we all belong
    And until we meet you there one day, we promise to be strong.
    Our love will carry, through time and all it's dust
    Forever and always, we keep you with us.

    Submitted on 2010-09-16 22:47:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your rhyme and rhythm is perfect in this, and the sentiment is precious.

    The goodness of loved ones is even more memorable and missed when they are gone, and their spirit stays with us forever.

    Nice work Stefhy.
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

    this is beautiful. in my opinion, its perfect just the way it is. no need for editing it in any way. if i had a choice, i'd want this to be recited in MY funeral. it brings forth the courage and understanding of death.

    "You're leaving us so sweetly, to the place we all belong
    And until we meet you there one day, we promise to be strong.
    Our love will carry, through time and all it's dust
    Forever and always, we keep you with us."

    this is the part that hit me the most. it reminds me of my grandpa"s funeral. deep inside myself i was thinking something like this, but i was young and blinded by whatever was going through my head. had i heard something like this it would have probably helped me cope a lot more faster.

    kudos and fave from my heart. keep it up girl.
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]

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