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    dots Submission Name: Above the cloudsdots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 481
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1980



    Description:
       Not very good, but I understand what I mean and I am keeping it up regardless of how bad it may be.


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    dotsAbove the cloudsdots
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    Standing here
    Why am I not there?
    I need release
    From this human form

    I am so trapped,
    locked down to the ground
    And no one hears a sound,
    down here.

    Don't they say
    If you can imagine it
    Then it can be true?
    Then why aren't I with you?
    And why am I locked here?

    I know
    Things have got to change
    I cant keep going this way
    Lookin' left and right with nowhere to go
    From here

    Either way I lose,
    Why do I, have to choose?
    I just wanna be smart,
    I wanna follow my heart,
    I wanna be beautiful,
    I wanna be great at art,
    But where do I start?

    You cant do it all
    Hurry do something
    Before you fall

    But I want it all

    This stupid reality
    Its trapping me
    If I can imagine then why cant I obtain
    Am I fricking insane?

    In my dreams
    I have wings
    And it always seems,
    So real

    Up in my head,
    Regardless of whats said
    I can have everything

    Deep in my mind
    You will find
    A rainbow

    At the top I will stand
    Holding his hand
    - And I will have
    Everything

    I can pause time,
    read in between lines,
    And im not out of my
    Mind.

    Its the ultimate high
    Hell I'm up in the sky
    And no one can,
    pull me down from the rainbow

    I glance left and glance right
    Both are in sight
    and I dont have to choose
    Because,
    either way I will loose.
    So I dont have to choose!

    I will stay on top of the rainbow
    up in the sky
    I dont have to die
    To be free

    Im finally on the other side-

    Up in the sky.




    Submitted on 2010-09-17 13:27:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      quite impressive. i can feel so much raw sadness from this. i know the feeling all too well. to want to be with someone all over again by all means necessary. to have their embrace just one more time. this is great.

    "I glance left and glance right
    Both are in sight
    and I don't have to choose
    Because,
    either way I will loose.
    So I don't have to choose!"

    this line is one i agree with most. im quite interested in seeing more of your work. i will read all of the rest of what you have so prepare for alot of comments. and id like to see more of your future writings, hence i will add you to my stalking list. as for this post, fave. keep it up. you have the potential to get better, i can only hope your willing to push yourself to the next level.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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