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    dots Submission Name: Tribute to Pop-Eyedots
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    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Just to note that this happened years ago.


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    Gleaming claws, fuzzy back
    Sharpened teeth, muscles slack
    Never unfriendly, never sated
    Always hungry, hunger never abated
    Getting lazier; doing less
    Getting fatter, I must confess

    Now you're in perhaps a better place
    I hope there is a smile on your face

    Lying there, not moving much
    Must be in pain, you cry all the time
    Can't release you, I wish you got better
    I leave the house, I need some space

    A few hours latter a recieve the call
    This was a few years ago, I remember it all
    Perhaps it was because you grew fat
    I say farewell again, farewell my cat




    Submitted on 2004-07-26 15:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very interesting! I like how you put it all together it just seems right. And if it is about a pet like it seems then almost everyone should be able to relate to it! Keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Linz | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem makes me think you lost a cat. the poems rhymes but you could do alot more if you really vented out your feelings and used more figurative language and literature elements like similies, apart from that it great Oh!
    and if your cat did really die I am sorry
    | Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Henriamaa | [ Reply to This ]
      aww... how cute! i love the relationship shown throughout the poem. i have a few pets and i know how close u can bond with a pet. i cried my eyes out when i lost my hamster haha but i can really relate, u did a great job
    | Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]


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