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Tribute to Pop-Eye

Author: RequiemOfDreams
ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
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Just to note that this happened years ago.

Tribute to Pop-Eye

Gleaming claws, fuzzy back
Sharpened teeth, muscles slack
Never unfriendly, never sated
Always hungry, hunger never abated
Getting lazier; doing less
Getting fatter, I must confess

Now you're in perhaps a better place
I hope there is a smile on your face

Lying there, not moving much
Must be in pain, you cry all the time
Can't release you, I wish you got better
I leave the house, I need some space

A few hours latter a recieve the call
This was a few years ago, I remember it all
Perhaps it was because you grew fat
I say farewell again, farewell my cat

Submitted on 2004-07-26 15:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very interesting! I like how you put it all together it just seems right. And if it is about a pet like it seems then almost everyone should be able to relate to it! Keep up the great work!
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Linz | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem makes me think you lost a cat. the poems rhymes but you could do alot more if you really vented out your feelings and used more figurative language and literature elements like similies, apart from that it great Oh!
and if your cat did really die I am sorry
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Henriamaa | [ Reply to This ]
  aww... how cute! i love the relationship shown throughout the poem. i have a few pets and i know how close u can bond with a pet. i cried my eyes out when i lost my hamster haha but i can really relate, u did a great job
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]

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