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    dots Submission Name: Germdots

    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1557/457/118
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 767
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Old stuff revisited. One very slight change.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    How does it start? If anything, a protoplasmic contemplation growing exponentially like melons in a pumpkin patch in furrows until bursting forth on sleeping giants projected on each wall that separates. Help us please! Can we but guess what motives Jung or Freud ascribe? Sein oder Nichtsein, Gott - können wir verstehen?

    Contagious aspiration blooms, humanity defined anew,
    groomed in a fire of long desire, collective mind of National.
    Vermächtnis des Vaters und Brust der Mutter,
    father's bequest and mother's breast,
    defines the quest, put's all to test.

    Zeugen Sie die Supermenschen!
    Verrücktheit tankte durch Blut und Tod.
    Selected seed, madness indeed,
    blood and death to all the rest,
    upon a pyre, within a pit
    go "problems" and all witnesses.

    Infektion in der Tat, eine Pest von Art.
    A simple diagnosis, infection indeed,
    a plague of sorts, hatred of the masses, by the masses.
    Til Death takes all, the large and small,
    his laughter rides the wind.

    Submitted on 2010-09-18 23:27:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Toll, aber sehr traurig... Meine Eltern sind doctors for the sick. Unfortunately not for society... I guess there are multiple germs out there, but not all of them are bad! As my mother inclines to constantly remind me whenever I appear like a hypochondriac, germs make our immune system stronger! So maybe they aren't all that bad. Ich habe keine ahnung... :P sorry if my German is a bit rusty, I have only been learning for a few years.

    Thanks for sharing, this is an interesting concept and I think I completely annihilated it, sorry...

    | Posted on 2010-12-27 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm i havent much to say except i looooove the german. and it was a very interesting subject to write about, i dont think theirs ever an end to what you can write about a germ. good write!
    | Posted on 2010-12-17 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      I have no German, so was a bit lost.
    Yet, I like the ranting rhyme scheme, and your apt descriptions of rampant nationalism.
    Perhaps education and understanding will become an effective vaccine for that germ.
    We can hope.

    Nice work, Lloyd!

    | Posted on 2010-10-11 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of a line from one of my posts . "While social stigmatism blind becomes its own creation , to tie the hands and feet of all and shadow our perception" . This line is from my post "Jacks to open" and speaks of how different segments of society all have their own peculiar states of ostracizing that in the end only work for the demise of all . Although my German is failing these days thats is what I get from this write . I totally agree . The devil's "laughter rides the wind" . Indeed , Contagious aspiration blooms, humanity defined anew" . Thanks , this was inspirational .
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay you should try making two versions to this because it's difficult as [censored].It friggin' has high - low quality.I get interested into it and then I see multiple lines of what is too unclear.Needs another [censored] version.
    | Posted on 2010-09-19 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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