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Rules of Engagement


Author: Porcelaine
ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880 /703 /256
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Rules of Engagement



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For wasted words and frozen tongue
For shaky letters and bitter ink
All inhale encouraged chokes
Empty pages when I couldn't think

Forgive me

For all that I can be in smiles
For all my wholesome pieces' puzzle
And all my music rendered skies
Where all my strange ideas dazzle

See me

For all the ill-corrupted looks
For every sting of hollow's scowl
All the trial marks on my skin
And wrenching nausea in my bowels

Touch me

For every moment's frightened shock
For angry tears in blistering pain
For every song that brings me down
For every day of the insane

Hold me

For both our knees to give away
For all the colors 'hind my lids
For every taste that is a drug
Every lust embedded pleads

Kiss me

For all my vainly open palms
For every sigh that I replenish
All the butterflies for fools
And every heart infested blemish

Love me

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Submitted on 2010-09-20 17:01:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You offer a look at yourself in this poem and ask for love of who you are. That would not be difficult. I wish you ever happiness with your lover. May he touch you the may you touch others.
| Posted on 2010-09-26 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. I thoroughly enjoyed this!
One line that I really felt was the empty pages when I couldn't think one, that happens to me and its such a sad frustrating feeling.

Overall the whole thing was marvelous, I love the flow and rhythm.
| Posted on 2010-09-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  This makes me think of a heart ravished and challenged by tragedy and turmoil, but earnestly human, desiring love, tender touch, and compassionate understanding. Its mood and tempo go beyond muse, and tread into ancient ritual and rites.

It is very profound, open to much interpretation, but a yearning stands out from the poem that is compelling.
| Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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