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    dots Submission Name: Rules of Engagementdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsRules of Engagementdots
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    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    For wasted words and frozen tongue
    For shaky letters and bitter ink
    All inhale encouraged chokes
    Empty pages when I couldn't think

    Forgive me

    For all that I can be in smiles
    For all my wholesome pieces' puzzle
    And all my music rendered skies
    Where all my strange ideas dazzle

    See me

    For all the ill-corrupted looks
    For every sting of hollow's scowl
    All the trial marks on my skin
    And wrenching nausea in my bowels

    Touch me

    For every moment's frightened shock
    For angry tears in blistering pain
    For every song that brings me down
    For every day of the insane

    Hold me

    For both our knees to give away
    For all the colors 'hind my lids
    For every taste that is a drug
    Every lust embedded pleads

    Kiss me

    For all my vainly open palms
    For every sigh that I replenish
    All the butterflies for fools
    And every heart infested blemish

    Love me

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~




    Submitted on 2010-09-20 17:01:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You offer a look at yourself in this poem and ask for love of who you are. That would not be difficult. I wish you ever happiness with your lover. May he touch you the may you touch others.
    | Posted on 2010-09-26 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I thoroughly enjoyed this!
    One line that I really felt was the empty pages when I couldn't think one, that happens to me and its such a sad frustrating feeling.

    Overall the whole thing was marvelous, I love the flow and rhythm.
    | Posted on 2010-09-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me think of a heart ravished and challenged by tragedy and turmoil, but earnestly human, desiring love, tender touch, and compassionate understanding. Its mood and tempo go beyond muse, and tread into ancient ritual and rites.

    It is very profound, open to much interpretation, but a yearning stands out from the poem that is compelling.
    | Posted on 2010-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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