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    dots Submission Name: Sunrise. dots

    Author: idonthaveaname
    ASL Info:    18/M/Around
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 8/0/2
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1841

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    dotsSunrise. dots

    I shivered for a few moments in the cool air as I watched the sunrise enfold in front of me. The sun had made its way fully above the horizon and the light was spreading out like a picnic blanket over the land. The world seemed like a different place as the light crept around each corner and illuminated it. The birds sang sweetly somewhere in the distance, and the clouds seemed to smile as the light pushed through them. Waves shimmered and the sky seemed to echo the sea bellow as it absorbed the light from the sun, like a battery charging up for the day ahead of it. In the distance I could hear gulls cawing. The whistle of the wind in my ears was like a song. The sand beneath my feet seemed to grasp onto my warmth, eager and ready to take in heat. I wiggled my toes and felt the cool dryness of the sand slide between them. It was like the entire world was waiting anxiously to do their jobs, the sand ready to embrace and hold fast to the warmth of the day, the sky ready to shine blue in distance, the waves ready to crash down on the shore and shape the landscape, the wind ready to breathe life to the world. It was like an orchestra warming up for the coming symphony of the day. I watched as everything fell seamlessly into place, waiting restlessly for the conductor to take his place in the sky. Slowly the sun made its way higher and higher into the waiting arms of the sky until it was too bright to look at. The gulls were crowing and carrying on as if to say ‘hurry up start the show’ as they swooped and dived above and below the horizon. I took a deep breath in and felt the salty air kiss my lungs as I breathed out. I took another deep breath in as I stared out at the ocean and stretched my arms above my head before letting them fall peacefully down to my sides. I smiled. I knew it was going to be great day.

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      this is good but I see that you categorized it as a poem. It fits the prose category better. But I liked it. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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