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    dots Submission Name: Your Not With MEdots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 951
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Another childish poem written long ago. just thought i would see what everyone thought of it!


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    dotsYour Not With MEdots
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    Now that your not with me
    My feelings you can surley see

    Once a month I go on through
    Trying to think of how to get with you

    Wouldn't you think I would learn
    Learn how to get my heart to trun

    My heart to turn from you
    Even tho it still is true

    True as the morning sun
    To you I still would run

    Even tho I have no idea what to do
    No matter what I'll still love you




    Submitted on 2004-07-26 16:19:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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