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    dots Submission Name: The living deaddots

    Author: Silencer
    ASL Info:    25/m/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 52/66/29
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe living deaddots

    I dream and I cry.
    I get up and I die.

    Dear God my Lord I plead.
    Where is my adoring wife I so desperately need?

    Submitted on 2010-09-22 22:28:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow stort but to the point this is sad thanks for posting it...

    | Posted on 2011-01-31 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem, although it uses rhyme pairs that I've seen used before, was pretty good in that it conveyed power and pain. It was a bit confusig though, because from the title:

    The living dead

    I assume the subject will be something to do with betrayal. But now that I think about it, in relation to the rest of the poem, I realzie that perhaps it is talking how the living might be worse of than the dead. Yes.

    I dream and I cry.
    I get up and I die.

    I had this same feeling in mind when I wrote my poem, Cheryl B. Mayberry. It was actually a whole story, about her and her husband, which I basically summarized into a poem. I thank God that I have never felt this way though, just a bit of my imagination, and I hope you have not either. (And if you have, my sincerest sympathies.)

    Dear God my Lord I plead.
    Where is my adoring wife I so desperately need?

    I'm left feeling very sorry for the speaker. But I admire how you, unlike many, do not "get angry" with God at times when you are suffering.
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by coloredstone | [ Reply to This ]

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