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    dots Submission Name: I never liked the word "crazy"dots
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    Author: tjsmith5
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    dotsI never liked the word "crazy"dots
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    because it's so broad.

    The women I date tell
    me they were crazy in college.

    Ted Bundy and the Son of Sam
    on A&E features are
    called insane and homicidal
    and, of course, crazy.

    The black ladies at work tell me once a week
    "T.J., you so crazy!"

    Yes, I've been crazy.

    When I was small,
    it was from my father's eyes and voice
    like hot grease popping on the skin.

    Then in my pleadings with God Almighty,
    to make my mind sprint more quickly
    to physics and calculus and thermodynamics
    so I could get the 'A' and the little high.

    I've been crazy in a paper mill
    from Yankee bosses
    with buck teeth and no chin
    and from fat assed stock prep helpers
    who only want to fight.

    I've been crazy from the
    far gone women of my life
    and all their fornications
    with professors and preacher's sons,
    sailors in hotels in Pensacola
    doctors in Red Cross tents
    after a hurricane.

    I've ridden on beachside roads
    on pretty days
    while screaming at my windshield
    until blood sprayed
    onto the steering wheel.

    But on this
    particular afternoon in September
    I'm enjoying a muffuletta and bottled Dr. Pepper,
    tracking down Goo Goo Dolls tickets
    for me and my only two friends.

    It could very well be
    the first sane moment of my life.

    Only took me 32 years to see it.

    That's not bad, I'd say.

    Bay St. Louis, MS - 9/23/10

























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      oh wow..slipped back to your page...and man this poem really socked me in the eye...

    "crazy is as crazy does i guess"
    but there are so many degrees of oddness or whimsy or eccentricity..."crazy" is thrown around way too much..

    but the lines and images here...too many to name the favorites...but i'll try..."my father's eyes and voice/ like hot grease popping on the skin"

    wicked

    the entire "far gone women" stanza...that is visual to me..
    "screaming at the windshield / until blood sprayed on my steering wheel"

    so good...

    this is like kerouac..only better for me cause i don't like him much...at least not "on the road" couldn't ever get through it..but his blues poetry is interesting in spots..this piece is like one of those spots..

    why has this one not gotten attention...i am floored...

    "the first sane moment of my life"

    yes..

    funny coincidence..i was just asking a friend of mine where Dr. Pepper was invented..in what state?

    it was a question in our trivia contest friday night...

    it's a good thing i strapped on my seat belt to read this...

    good wild ride.


    jacob
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