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    dots Submission Name: Airdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    This hill beyond my home I walk
    To see the evening sunset flare,
    Where, on occasion, ghosts may stalk
    Upon the air.

    I’ll sit beside the oak and sigh,
    Both cold and sad and solitaire,
    And gaze into that star crossed sky,
    Up in the air.

    Then thunder rumbles low and far,
    I think I spy a spiral stair,
    And think it leads to that pale star,
    Yet it's just air.

    Another star winks mightily,
    It is that fateful star, Altair,
    That glows above the eastern sea
    High in the air.

    Sometimes a clutching sorrow claws,
    When on such nights alone I fare
    To brood on arcane cosmic laws
    And breathe this air.

    One eve a ghost girl found me here,
    She asked for love I could not spare,
    She sighed. I watched her disappear
    In that thin air.

    Planets painted calm and neatly,
    Here mitigate against despair
    I hear one madrigal sung sweetly
    Upon the air.




    Submitted on 2010-09-23 13:50:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-09-24 00:00:00 | by only_a_dreamX | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the poem gave me an imagitve feeling, like i was in a dream world or dream land, whatever that means, but yeah man good write keep up the creative thought
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of those cold nights when the air is so clean smelling and sharp you can feel it filling your lungs like a balm. It's just air but it's also life you breathe in. Those kinds of nights I feel...exhilarated in one moment and thoughtful in the second. Somehow the stars only make you wonder about everything. My neck used to hurt for the amount of time I would spend staring up, especially at the time when the Earth passes through the Kuipers belt at summer and you have your whole night full of shooting stars. I've wondered off :) This is so wonderful.
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, sweet air! Purveyor of sweet smells, exotic sounds, and the ether that contains the memory of old and cherished love affairs!

    The very air that we breathe from the universe, that thousands of years ago, was exhaled by a primitive man (or mammoth!), and that we take so for granted until it is denied us!!!

    Your poem is delightful, and causes one to muse on all of the universal things that appear, and dissapear, into thin air!

    Nice work!!
    | Posted on 2010-09-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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