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    dots Submission Name: Squirmingdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.81 - 62/90/71
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       just another way of saying how the world makes me feel


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    dotsSquirmingdots
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    Inching, and squirming.
    I can't help but to be stepped on.
    The ground gets so cold,
    and I am naked...
    I am there;
    when you can't see me.
    I am silent,
    and squirming...
    I cry inside myself:
    even i can't hear me.
    The days are taking toll;
    as I inch away,
    withering...
    The children think it's fun,
    to cut me into pieces.
    But I just won't die.
    I just keep squirming...
    It's not their fault;
    they don't know any better.
    Piece by piece,
    they stomp on my body.
    I scream as my heart keeps beating;
    but even i can't hear me...
    Over time I can heal,
    but the rain washes me out everytime,
    and these kids just won't;
    leave me be...
    I am inching away:
    slowly...
    I am squirming inside;
    just won't die:
    I am but,
    a lonely worm...
    will no one help me?




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