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    dots Submission Name: Who I have Becomedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
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    dotsWho I have Becomedots
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    A look and the mirror
    the person staring back at me
    Is not met
    Then again it is..?

    I have sought out to not be who I am
    I worked so hard
    day in & day out not to be who I have became

    Acknowledgment of this has me into a deeper darker depression
    It all comes crashing down
    And pulls me down with it...

    Hopped up on pills I am
    shhh... no one knows
    My excuses are just that
    Lame at best
    for I can't shake the feeling

    numbing myself
    ingoring my phyical and emotional pain
    I'm lost and getting more confused as each moment passes




    Submitted on 2010-09-24 07:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW. Is my first thought and "Man I've been there before" is my second. I know the hell it is to go through when you wake up one morning look at yourself and can feel nothing but loathing. No matter who you are. its awful to hae yourself and sometimes you just have to except and sometimes you have to keep on fighting and fighting until you meet the person you want to be and merge the two together. it takes alot of determination and spirit. But don't give up. if You can't love yourself then make a person you can love.
    I like the post its deep and I can relate. well written.

    Keep uop the good work and I'll keep reading

    H
    | Posted on 2010-10-05 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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