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    dots Submission Name: Sea Of City Lightsdots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 194/91/52
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
    Total Views: 480
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    Bytes: 1117



    Description:
       I'm distrustful of love that blossoms fast. Passion leads to heartache. I want a "sit on the porch sipping coffee slow" kind of love. The kind that warms you from the top, down. The last swallow doesn't leave you craving more. Just leaves you satisfied and ready to start your day.



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    dotsSea Of City Lightsdots
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    We are both lost.
    Somewhere between
    Where We Started Out
    and
    Where We Meant To Go.
    So many people wander these roads,
    and we
    just-so-happened
    to stop and rest at the same spot.
    We found each other.
    We are still lost, but
    Lost Together.


    We race through The Mountain at 100 +, and it's so dark I almost forget where we are. I look out the window and see so many stars, and I can't help but wish on every single one. The occasional headlight illuminates your face and that's when I get my chance to sneak a glance at you...small smiles.

    We come over that last uphill and round the corner. Sea of City Lights lay beneath us and I hold my breath. Close my eyes and that's when I imagine you're sneaking your peek at me. Small smiles....

    The lights of El Paso shine bright, and in those moments with you, I forget all about the stars. I forget all about the wishes.







    September 24, 2010 ~ El Paso, Tx




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      Just plain nice, I enjoyed every word. Enjoy it while you can, and may it last for you. Cheers Ted.
    | Posted on 2010-09-25 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]


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