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    dots Submission Name: Warmer Climatesdots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 194/91/52
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsWarmer Climatesdots
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    Take a dive into me.
    The cold is like a slap in the face
    unexpected, shocking,
    and the shiver makes your bones rattle.

    I never learned the language of
    chattering teeth
    or silence.
    Which are the only two reactions I get
    after the last page is turned.
    And for the life of me, I can't figure out whether the molars knocking together
    or the complete lack of noise,
    is from
    fear
    anger
    indifference
    confusion....

    I only know it's never love.

    Polite smiles remind me of broken mirrors. There's something about the two that disgusts me.

    However

    I can understand the discomfort
    of diving into water
    in the middle of winter.
    Perhaps I should try
    for warmer climates
    where my cold
    would be more appreciated.




    Submitted on 2010-09-24 14:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      in MY opinion... interesting. this put a hell of an imagery in my head. excellent choice and style of words.

    "Polite smiles remind me of broken mirrors. There's something about the two that disgusts me."

    i liked that. makes me interested in reading more of your work. look forward to seeing more comments from me.
    -aaron
    | Posted on 2010-09-29 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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