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Warmer Climates


Author: was_i_ever_real
ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
Elite Ratio:    8 - 194 /91 /52
Words: 134
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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I'm not sure.....


Warmer Climates



Take a dive into me.
The cold is like a slap in the face
unexpected, shocking,
and the shiver makes your bones rattle.

I never learned the language of
chattering teeth
or silence.
Which are the only two reactions I get
after the last page is turned.
And for the life of me, I can't figure out whether the molars knocking together
or the complete lack of noise,
is from
fear
anger
indifference
confusion....

I only know it's never love.

Polite smiles remind me of broken mirrors. There's something about the two that disgusts me.

However

I can understand the discomfort
of diving into water
in the middle of winter.
Perhaps I should try
for warmer climates
where my cold
would be more appreciated.




Submitted on 2010-09-24 14:43:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  in MY opinion... interesting. this put a hell of an imagery in my head. excellent choice and style of words.

"Polite smiles remind me of broken mirrors. There's something about the two that disgusts me."

i liked that. makes me interested in reading more of your work. look forward to seeing more comments from me.
-aaron
| Posted on 2010-09-29 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]


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